Don’t Lose Your Reader
By Andrea Merrell
The conversation with my husband was going well until I
switched gears in the middle. I knew exactly what I was talking about and the
point I was trying to make. He had no clue. As I went back to the original
subject, he was still stuck on my temporary rabbit trail. His expression
clearly said, “You lost me.”

To better explain, a woman’s mind resembles a plate of spaghetti. Just as each piece of pasta
touches or intertwines with the others, so does a woman’s thoughts. Because of
this, she can jump from one subject to an entirely unrelated one and back, with
five rabbit trails in between, and never miss a beat. Men have a hard time
keeping up. To women, it’s normal. It’s the way we’re wired. To men, it's exhausting.
As Bill and Pam Farrel put it in their book Men Are Like Waffles—Women Are Like
Spaghetti:
The
typical man lives in one box at a time and one box only. When a man is at work,
he is at work. When he is in the garage tinkering around, he is in the garage
tinkering. When he is watching TV, he is simply watching TV. That is why he
looks as though he is in a trance and can ignore everything else going on
around him.

We can lose our readers in a number of ways:
- Too much backstory
- Telling, not showing
- Events not unfolding in chronological order
- Dialogue issues (no speaker beats or tags)
- POV issues (point of view)
We need to write in such a way that our readers can follow,
understand, and remember. This is why critique groups, beta readers, and
editors are so important. They can easily spot problems in our story that we
can’t see.
As an example, I’ve had beta readers tell me that something my
protagonist did or said seemed out of character for her. Or that I should flesh-out my characters more. They needed to know more about them. Sometimes I had to ratchet up the conflict or stop taking rabbit trails that led them
away from the story. One of the best pieces of advice was avoiding too much
backstory.
As an editor, one of the biggest problems I see in manuscripts is POV
not being established immediately in a chapter or scene. When I have to read
several paragraphs before I know whose head I’m in, it pulls me out of the
story. The same thing happens when I don’t know who is speaking.
All these problems can be easily fixed as we learn, grow, and
perfect our skills. So whether you have a spaghetti or waffle brain, make sure
your words unfold in such a way that you never lose your reader.
(Photo courtesy of FreeDigitalPhotos.net, num_skyman, and Suat Eman.)
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